It's not a Brochure Day in Turks and Caicos
Sun-beat and in need of beer, I maneuver among broken bottles and wind-swept bags that line the main road of Providencials—the largest Island of Turks and Caicos—a British overseas territory in the West Indies. I have left behind the confines of Beaches, the island’s largest all-inclusive corporately owned resort, amid numerous warnings that outside the walls tourists like me are not safe from robbery and worse. I am alert to my surroundings as cars race past, driving on the left side of the road but manufactured for the right—a fitting metaphor for colonial rule in the twenty-first century—which has twisted and crippled the islands economic infrastructure in waves of political corruption more devastating than Hurricane Ike. The 2008 storm that destroyed eighty percent of Provo’s buildings and set back the people’s fight for sovereignty that has been going on since the late 1970’s. From where I stand the resorts 45,000 square-foot, state-of-the-art Water Park and three magnificent villages “boasting the architecture and ambiance of Italy, France and the Caribbean” begin to look a lot like some pastel colored castle, rising from the coral ashes of the slums that surround it.
Throwing caution to the Caribbean wind, I ignore the resort’s warnings and hail down a local man who introduces himself as Robby. Inquiring as to where I can find the nearest locally owned bar he gestures off into the distance where a cluster of shacks stand among overgrown tropical shrubbery, beaconing me to follow him down into the heart of the slums. We walk along white sand streets where chickens walk and men sit in clusters, stopping to stare as I go by. Signs stand out-front the grey sadness of cinder-block homes, reading “Governor No Job, Go Home” and “End British Tyranny;” however, I do not feel fear, only a vague thankfulness to be paying for a beer to someone who truly needs the money. Inside the small establishment I am the only customer—spare Robby—and the women behind the bar meet my gaze with surprise, speaking amongst themselves in the traditional Turks and Caicos dialect while smoking cigarettes and watch Spanish soap-operas. Robby orders up a round of Guinness—on me of course—and there we sit worlds apart, drinking a beer from a place neither of us has ever seen.
Too often in traveling we lose sight of where we actually are and Beaches does everything in its power to necessitate this blindness. Most that enter the all-inclusive paradise never leave its walls, occupying their time with resort activities and all the food and booze they can handle. I too enjoyed such perks—in particular the free scuba diving—which took up the majority of my vacation, sailing to different sites along the coast. Turks and Caicos is ranked by the Professional Association of Diving Instructors (PADI) as the seventh best dive destination in the world. However, I quickly became accustomed to hearing the phrase “today is not a brochure day” as we plunged into the depths of coral graveyards equally devastated by Hurricane Ike. The aquatic life was sparse compared to dives off Cozumel’s coast, and the coral less colorful than that of Dominica. On a clear day the famed crystal waters of the Caribbean held true—offering fifty to eighty feet of visibility—yet this only made it more apparent that the delicate ecosystem had been irrevocably damaged by the 2008 storm season.
With no economy other than tourism, it would be shortsighted of me to condemn an already impoverished island to further poverty by saying that the diving wasn’t worth the ticket. Despite Ike I saw a wide variety of aquatic life: lion fish, reef sharks, stingrays, sea turtles and even dolphin (a first in my career as a diver). Back on land, the luxurious resorts luxurious atmosphere was easy enough to enjoy, drowning my western guilt ridden conscious in rum and some of the freshest seafood I had ever tasted. As an American, I sympathize with those on the islands of Turks and Caicos. Not so long ago we too sought our independence from British colonial rule, and even more recently struggled against politically corrupt governments. The same hurricanes that batter their coast broke our levies around New Orleans; and as it would seem the spirit of Turks and Caicos is strangely kindred to that of our own nation. Perhaps this was what I felt as Robby and I shared drinks in that small dive bar on the outskirts of town. The silence between us not from animosity or fear but from a comfortable unspoken understanding that although we live worlds apart, what affects our lives is not so different. All things run into each other and tell a bigger story, I thought as we toasted another glass. Robby said laughing, “God save the queen” ironically referring to the island’s national anthem. God save the islander, I thought, before ordering up another round on me.
Friday, April 23, 2010
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Aaron,
ReplyDeleteThis piece is very well-written. I liked your use of description to show and not tell what the trip was like. Your lurking sense of danger was exciting throughout the piece.
I felt like I saw the same things you did and I was interested in reading more about your trip. You didn't just focus on one thing either - which was nice. I liked how you included the luxurious details about the aquatic life that tourists would ultimately be interested in reading about.
Aaron,
ReplyDeleteI really like your introduction and title. Your imagery is great and I can really picture the setting of your story. I also like the deeper connections you make to human nature and the comparisons between this British colony and the US as a former British colony. I also really love your last sentence.
Although I think both parts are important to your story, the transition between the bar scene and your description of the diving and resort could flow a little better. Maybe if you just rearranged some of the paragraphs it would help connect them more? Great story!
Caitlin
Aaron,
ReplyDeleteThis is clever and well written. The tie-ins are very impressive. Mainly, I like how your dive bar trip, and encounter with Robby is a parallel for the similarities of the countries.
The quality of your descriptions is pretty top shelf stuff. Some sentence seem to go on and on--could use some rewording?--but for the most part, they are concise and informative. You also establish a lot of credibility which makes the read very satisfying; instead of getting just your feelings on the subject, we get some very relevant and important information. This is some good writing.
Aaron,
ReplyDeleteThis is a very well written essay. I like how although it is a travel piece, it's not all sunshine and beaches. You managed to take a personal story and turn it into something much larger. You use great descriptive language and also seem to know a lot about diving which is something I have never tried but would certainly like to. Overall, really nice job...
Aaron,
ReplyDeleteThis is very well done. I liked how you split your time talking about the island outside the walls of the resort as well as what you did within the resort. This gave the essay a nice balance. I also like how you incorporated a lot of history within your story, that gave the reader a really nice background on the island, and put your story into context.
I also liked how you developed Robby as a character within your piece, I thought that was a nice touch. Overall, really well written!
-Katie
Aaron,
ReplyDeleteThis was a great work for a number of things—first off, because you took it in a completely different direction than any other travel essay I’ve read for this class. You brought a unique perspective by doing something bold and leaving the comfort of the tourist-friendly areas and the boldness of this is well reflected in your writing. Your voice in this piece also adds to the quality. I liked the lines you added like “throwing caution to the Caribbean wind,” or when you observed that the cars mismatched for the roads was a reflection of the colonial rule.
You did a great job of describing these two completely different worlds that are coexisting beside each other. My only suggestion is that maybe you could briefly highlight other things in “Beaches” besides the scuba diving so we could make further comparisons between the tourist-world and the outside one. Other than that, though, great job with this, and I particularly liked your closing line because it showed how much thought and introspection you really drew from the whole experience of it.
-Emma
Aaron,
ReplyDeleteI like your theme here. I like how you've created two types of Turks and Caicos experiences, the brochure day and the non-brochure day. It is truly evident that your purpose here is to expose the corporate facilities contrasting image with the actual native standard of living.
I think one thing that could help with your essay is to employ a little bit of framing. I think you could introduce the idea of non-brochure days in SCUBA then say because you continued to encounter "non-brochure days", you opted to venture out into the real Turks and Caicos.
I think your piece could also be improved with a little bit more sensory imagery. There's surely a certain sound contrast between the resort T&C and the real T&C. I think Robby could especially use a little more in-depth description. What does the accent sound like? What is he wearing? How does he walk? Etc...
All in all, really neat experience here, just needs to be stretched out a little more.
Aaron,
ReplyDeleteAwesome piece. It certainly seems like a tan wasn’t all you got out of your trip. Your descriptions and details really make the island come alive, and your use of the present tense helps move the piece along. It’s ornate, but reads easily.
I’m struggling with the two themes, though. Both the devastation of Ike and ill effects of British imperialism are solid themes, but their relation in this piece could be expanded on further. I think that comparing them to similar events in our history is effective, but could introduced earlier in the piece so it doesn’t feel so overtly like you’re trying to wrap things up at the end. I’m not sure. Regardless, the piece is great, awesome work.
-Jackson Breyer
Very well written; you've got a couple points that make major impressions, mainly your "fitting metaphor for colonial rule in the twenty-first century" and one of your themes "to often in traveling we lose sight of where we actually are." You do an excellent job of depicting the dual nature of islands (and other places, of course) and the history behind it, but the story seems to have a diverging theme toward the end. Is the story about your experience with the island as "not a brochure day" as the title suggests, or is it about the dual nature of the island and the how and why it became that way? Finding a way to help the reader form the ties you've made between diving, the ecosystem, the economy, and the island's history, would definitely give your paper a stronger flow. Overall, this is a great story and very well written - your voicing is fantastic and so is your ability to report history and draw connections.
ReplyDeleteAaron,
ReplyDeleteThis was a nice, simple, heartfelt piece, and I really enjoyed reading it. I liked the use of the man-behind-the-curtain feel of this world where there is resort, which natives want you to focus on, and there is ghetto, which is how most of them live.
I liked the commentary of the piece more than the travel writing, and I think that you should focus more on the message than the travel info. I do like the present tense you use in the beginning, but be careful because you switched tenses a couple of times in the piece. Also, the first time you mention Hurricane Ike, add that next sentence as part of the first one, because it sounds awkward as a separate sentence.
Kevin Gillingham
Aaron,
ReplyDeleteYour description of the island of Turks and Caicos was amazing. I really enjoyed the historical context you threw in as part of your description (British rule & hurricanes which have impacted both Turks/Caicos and America). That was very creative and effective.
There were only a few punctuation errors and grammar issues, but these are easily fixed. There were a lot of words that I did not understand, which made it sometimes difficult, and your use of "beaconing" I believe should be "beckoning."
Anyways, solid piece. Keep up the good work!
-Mark
Aaron,
ReplyDeleteVery cool piece. It kind of had a Rum Diary type feel--you can never go wrong with being compared to Hunter S. Thompson. When I was down in the Dominican a few years back, one of the best experiences was when we went with some guy to ride ATVs and ended up chilling a local rum bar.
Aside from the chill style here, I think the inner thoughts about society are very effective. There really isn't much to critique here. As some other people pointed out, there are a few awkward structures, but that's an easy fix when editing. Good work.
Dan Heinkel