As a graduate of the JMU English Department, Mrs. Ashley Lauro is no stranger to the university’s writing program. Her teaching career came about during a graduate assistantship, in which she taught the General Education required writing course, GWRIT 103. Mrs. Lauro has remained committed to the First Year Writing Program hoping to instill in her students an appreciation for different writing styles and perspectives.
Having edited and published for two magazines during her undergraduate career, Mrs. Lauro most enjoys creative writing. Her favorite pieces of literature include Alice Walker’s, The Color Purple and Beloved written by Toni Morrison. While reading these books in high school, Lauro gained a new perspective on the world around her. “The Color Purple was the first book that I read that took me outside of my little bubble. It literally shook my world,” says Lauro. Her literary eye-opening experience spilled over into her career in that Lauro encourages her students to read books and articles that would broaden their social perspective.
She is also interested in studying and experimenting with different teaching pedagogies. Students enrolled in her class should look forward to an introduction to a fresh outlook on learning and instruction. “JMU offers a sophisticated approach to teaching writing,” says Mrs. Lauro, “and students at the university are definitely in a position to take on that challenge.”
Her personal writing style takes a professional tone. However, Mrs. Lauro encourages students to find their own voice by exposing them to different ideals and writing styles. She enjoys writing business letters and professional documents as well as creative writing pieces. In the future, Lauro intends to pursue a PhD in writing and hopes to broaden her own perspectives by teaching other classes.
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Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteYou touch upon many important points necessary for construction a good profile. You show an understating of the subject by emphasizing background information with additional information that gives the subject personality.
You effectively place quotes throughout your piece that also work as anecdotes. However I do have to say that some of your sentences are a little messy and rough to read. But overall, you have a concise profile that gives some insight about your subject beyond normal expectations. Good job.
You do a good job of presenting information about Lauro. It's well-written.
ReplyDeleteThe place that the profile works the best is the anecdote about The Color Purple.
The profile needs more of that. You can present information while also developing the character of Lauro. Why is she important? Why is she different from other professors? How does she interact with students?
Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteThis profile certainly gives a nice outline of her resume. You can tell how her writing career emerged. It has a professional tone which corresponds well with Lauro's own tone.
I would like to see more of a personal touch, however. Some anecdotes would really "beef" up this profile. I want to see more of Lauro's personality in the piece.
You have a nice start, now push the rest out!
-Maggee
Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteI think this is a pretty solid piece, but could benefit greatly from some tightening up. I think the information you provide is good, but could be expanded upon if you had more space to work with. A lot of your sentences seem to have phrases which could be stated more succinctly, to greater effect and giving you more space to work with. With that space, maybe some more background on Lauro would help flesh her out as a character. I think this is a good piece, it just needs some condensing and a bit more information.
-Jackson Breyer
Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteI liked this piece because it did give me an impression of this teacher I’d never met. I thought it was good to include what her inspirations were and tie it into how it influences her as a teacher. There are a few formatting things or sentences that could be rearranged, which I’ll underline in the copy of this in class instead of writing it all here. But I really enjoyed learning what you decided to include in this about her, especially that she intended to further her education. Great profile!
Emma
I enjoy the profile ashleigh. I agree that it gives a positive impression of the professor, which, for the website, is especially important. So, props there. Other people have brought up formatting issues, but it couldn't hurt to say again. I think that looking over the profile and reading it out loud could help you eliminate some fluffy words. It seems to meander a bit, especially in the first few paragraphs. But everything is in place for an excellent profile after a little revision
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Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a good job encompassing the major points in a good profile. You give some background info, her experiences, her ideals, and her future plans....which is enough to get to know a person in a general aspect. One recommendation, however, is to simplify your sentences and expand your content. I think that by reducing some sentence length you could easily add some new ideas into the profile like why she chose to stay at JMU at teach or something like that--small insightful things, nothing groundbreaking. Overall, I think you have a very nice profile!
Brittany
Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteYour profile flows in a clear and concise manner which engages the viewer and provides a natural progression from start to finish. I got the sense that Mrs. Lauro was fairly young, however I am not certain. When did she graduate from the JMU English Department? The fact she went to JMU is important in this piece, but leaves me wondering what made her decide to stay and work in the area, let alone the school?
When highlighting her favorite authors you list a book each one wrote; good work, this helps the reader better understand who they are and qualifies the authors.
Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteI don't know Ashley Lauro, but your profile is straightforward enough, that I have a sense of who she is--which is the purpose of the profile. So in that sense, the flow and precision works well in the informative manner.
The quote in the middle paragraph helps to emphasize some characterization. If you involved more of that kind of anecdote/opinion based information, from Ashley, it could help to make the profile feel more complete.
Tyler,
ReplyDeleteThis is a fun profile that really puts Mrs. Lauro in a good light, and seems great for the faculty website. However, there is little physical description the subject. I got no feeling of who she is visually, and what kind of character she is other than her philosophies and actions in the WRTC department. I would have liked to see more of a scene -- maybe her appearance or demeanor as she's teaching.
Also, I would like to have read more about her as a person. Who is she behind the editing and teaching. It's hard to hit on that in such a short profile, but some reference to her personal life helps the reader relate to the person you're profiling.
Kevin Gillingham
Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteI liked your structure and the information you chose to include gave a good snapshot of the professor's teaching career. I would like to see a few more personal details. I really liked the part about her literary epiphany in high school, it would definitely add to the piece if you included another anecdote - perhaps about her career at JMU.
Caitlin
Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteThis is a well-written piece. You cover a lot of ground in a limited amount of space. However, a problem that can arise from this is that the piece is a bit too general. A profile should be a little more personal. I feel like what I've read here is the summary on the back of a book, but I want to read the book. I realize that we're working with limited space, but if you highlight a few main points and go into more detail with them, it will bring this piece to life. This is a great start, though, so you should have no problem working with this.
Dan
Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteYou do a great job of getting quite a bit of information into a small amount of space, and overall I think this is well written. In particular I think you did an awesome job working in the short anecdote about The Color Purple, it flowed really nicely. I do think that the profile would benefit from a more personal touch. You spend a lot of time talking about her professional career, but it would be nice to hear a little more about her as a person, hobbies, your impressions of her etc. Also I think that putting something in about her interactions with her students might add another dimension to the piece.
-Katie
Nice job Ashleigh! I think you’ve done a swell job at establishing Lauro’s passion for writing and her profession in teaching. In he last paragraph, I’m not so sure her professional tone is contradicted by her encouragement on students to find their own voice. Perhaps a different transitional phrase would avoid this ambiguity.
ReplyDeleteAshleigh,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your profile of Lauro. It is difficult to profile younger professors that have not yet attained eclectic backgrounds, but you did a great job of characterizing your target with the anecdote about The Color Purple... You could definitely add some direct quotations to further your personal tone.
Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteI thought this was a good profile with a lot of information about professor Lauro. I liked how you talked about her favorite books, her undergraduate career, as well as her hopes for the future. It gave your profile a wide range that i think was important. However, i feel that towards the end it got a little flat and you lost your voice. This is a profile though, so i understand that it is not about you, but it should seem as if this was written by you, and not just anybody. All in all though i thought this was a really good profile and i could definitely see this on the wrtc website.
Ashleigh,
ReplyDeleteWell written profile. You can tell that you definitely asked some good questions during the interview. Your style of writing flows very well. May use more quotes from the professor? Overall I thought it was very well done though.
Woops. You're not in my class.
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